Wow! Talk about great use of syntax; love how fragmented the first one is. As for SCHRÖDINGER it just jumps off the page with colorful imagery!
Nice use of poetic language and imagery, I like how the first poem can be read a few different ways. :)
Really great work here! I particularly enjoyed "Schrodinger." It flows so well, and something about it felt distinctly unsettling to me; it almost felt haunting. The last few lines definitely stuck with me.
I really liked something about the rhythm in the first poem. It was free, but when read horizontally top to bottom you could feel the each side of that extended caesura had it's own metric intelligence working, a nice linguistic cohesion to go along with it's sense.
WoW, Amazing how you captured the first poem..... and well Done with both pieces!
I love the way language and formatting is used in the first poem! And the second poem has such a great rhythm!