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Post: “Colorblind Passengers” by Sean Enfield

Wed, 29 Mar 2017 10:57:19 GMT

JennyPonig
Wed, 29 Mar 2017 11:17:55 GMT

This story started out with such a carefree moment between two kids crushing on each other. It was obvious that this feeling wouldn't last when the author described his peanut butter skin and her sunless pale. Those descriptions were the start of a sustained tension between two young people not living in a colorblind world, which eventually broke them apart, and they grudgingly accepted it. It was funny...painfully funny in parts. This is one of the best stories I've read on TBL.

Alyssa Jordan
Tue, 04 Jul 2017 21:30:14 GMT

Really nice job! As Jenny said, there's great tension in this piece. I thought the ending was perfect, too; the last line really stuck with me.

EBlanco
Thu, 06 Jul 2017 16:22:01 GMT

Wow. Really captivating! I think you have a really emotive and beautiful voice throughout; it was really telling of who you were at the time and how you grew from the experience.

zoe_reads
Fri, 03 Nov 2017 03:02:46 GMT

You had my at "youth group served as Tinder". There were times you had me laughing, and other times you had me despairing. I completely agree with the perfect tension that you had here; it called for an extremely captivating piece that I really couldn't stop reading. It embodies the innocence of a new relationship, and the crushing ending that is very often inevitable. Phenomenal job!

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strivingforgreatness
Tue, 11 Sep 2018 03:18:51 GMT

From the very beginning, the stark comparison between the couple's differences lent to the dystopic feeling that, while the young couple swept us away with all the charm and grandeur of new love, it was to be short lived. What I found particularly captivating was how neither child was portrayed as "bad" or "wrong", even when the girl rationalized her {grand}fathers' blatant racism. I like how the reader had to second guess what was "normal" behavior and what was an expression of racism, especially with how closely intertwined the two behaviors seemed to be in this essay. Perhaps most influential was the last paragraph: the references to both kids being "products of their time" took agent away from the individual, which caused them to resign themselves to a supposed "uncontrollable force" that societal norms can come across as. This story was as powerful as it was relevant.