Wow. Absolutely stunning. The line breaks, the sensory thickness, the language use all combine to make these poems really memorable. I was particularly struck by the first one.--such a clear, incredible image.
Skillfully done! The images are so riveting and clear. nothing wasted. Such a pleasure to read. What a surprise ending for the second poem!
Both are very pleasing reads. I felt the the second poem ended on an abrupt turn, which made it all the more interesting on a second read.