Wow. Absolutely stunning. The line breaks, the sensory thickness, the language use all combine to make these poems really memorable. I was particularly struck by the first one.--such a clear, incredible image.
Skillfully done! The images are so riveting and clear. nothing wasted. Such a pleasure to read. What a surprise ending for the second poem!
Both are very pleasing reads. I felt the the second poem ended on an abrupt turn, which made it all the more interesting on a second read.
Really great work here. I didn't expect "The Raven's Wing" to end the way it did, and as others have said, that new knowledge made further re-readings all the more compelling.
"Gibbous moon breast" in "Another Sky" smacked me; it was lovely. But I haven't been struck by anything like "how/ much fuller your life/ could be, if only you had/ more money" in a long time. It's terrifying. It's going to ruin my sleep this week.